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Post by Mario Di Giacomo on Feb 28, 2010 5:54:03 GMT -8
OTOH, he didn't leave me a cliffhanger at all. And changed the tone of the story so drastically that I have no desire to follow him. I'm out.
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Post by jensaltmann on Feb 28, 2010 6:07:00 GMT -8
Urm. Right. I was so busy laughing that I hadn't realized the lack of a cliffhanger. Jesse, you need to revise the ending.
If Mario is out, it's now Michael's turn.
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Post by jessebaker on Feb 28, 2010 13:03:29 GMT -8
I've redone the ending for a more clearcut cliffhanger, as evil millionaire Cole Cameron ends up holding the midget assassin Miri in his arms and asking her what she's doing in the city (working for his nemesis Southern Man, something that she can't tell him) after her encounter with the weremonster from the Guild of Bad Internet Meme Monsters sent her flying out a window and into the villain's arms.
And I apologize about the tone shift not being to your liking Mario. Please reconsider and stay with the project.
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Post by Mario Di Giacomo on Feb 28, 2010 13:28:41 GMT -8
As René Descartes said, shortly before he disappeared, I think not.
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Post by jessebaker on Feb 28, 2010 13:45:59 GMT -8
As René Descartes said, shortly before he disappeared, I think not. At least tell me what I did wrong in your eyes, as far as criticism goes so that I can learn from my mistakes? |
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Post by Mario Di Giacomo on Feb 28, 2010 14:18:31 GMT -8
Leaving aside the spelling errors, killing off the heroes and replacing them with your own is a bad precedent in a collaborative fiction. What point is it to develop new characters when they can be tossed out without a second thought?
Add to that the random insertion of sadistic sex, scatology, WAY too much profanity, and otherwise disfunctional behavior, and it reads less like modern pulp and more like an attempt to out-Ennis Garth Ennis. And I don't like Ennis.
As for "the Guild of Bad Internet Meme Monsters", that's an idea for a parody, not a serious story.
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Post by jensaltmann on Mar 1, 2010 0:17:50 GMT -8
In fairness, Mario, I was the one who killed the Dead Knight.
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Post by Mario Di Giacomo on Mar 1, 2010 3:38:09 GMT -8
There's a slight difference between "The hero has been shot, and MAY be dead" and "the hero has been stabbed repeatedly by a gang of midget assassins and IS dead."  |
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Post by jensaltmann on Mar 1, 2010 7:50:08 GMT -8
In any case, Jesse: you will need to remember in the future that the group has no age restriction filter set up, and I have no intention to do so.
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Post by michaelpaciocco on Mar 1, 2010 9:54:01 GMT -8
I'm going throw myself into this mix up; Seeing as I'm in the midst of writing the next chapter I feel I have something to say.
First to Jens and Mario: you really should have seen this coming. Have you forgotten our various attempts at round robin fiction before concerning Jesse? Did you not know that this is exactly what would happen? For better or worse, we all need to exercise some responsibility and I think we all would have been better off if there had been some much clearer guidelines in order to reign in certain excesses that we all knew were going to be present.
And as for Jesse, you are clearly confused on the matter, so let me explain; Jens project is not an attempt at fanfiction writing nor is it YOUR personal project - it *IS* meant as a collaborative group effort and you can and should exercise some level of self restraint and a critical eye towards your own work. This is very much about learning to play well with others and to teach the toybox rule - If you are to take items out of the Toybox, you must put in at least something as good back in ("as good" being defined as something that the rest of the group will respect as legitimate and useful). Jesse you knew exactly who you were dealing with, who your follow-up writer was going to be (Mario) and what you should have anticipated. "Jesse being Jesse" is not an excuse. Please remember this for future chapters, or as your follow-up writer, I guarantee you that if you keep carrying on, I will make it a mission to dump every "mad idea" regardless of merit, with lethal and irrevocable dispatch. This is your only warning and I suggest you heed it.
Now, with all that said, I consider the matter close and I'm going to get back to writing the next chapter, and this time I will try to use Jesse's ideas to the best of my ability - stay tuned, I've got this.
Michael
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Post by Mario Di Giacomo on Mar 1, 2010 11:06:17 GMT -8
First to Jens and Mario: you really should have seen this coming. Have you forgotten our various attempts at round robin fiction before concerning Jesse? Apparently. The last round-robin story I recall being involved with was around or about 1988... |
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Post by jensaltmann on Mar 2, 2010 3:13:01 GMT -8
I've never been involved in a round robin story before, actually, so I don't have any prior experience.
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Post by michaelpaciocco on Mar 5, 2010 7:47:50 GMT -8
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Post by michaelpaciocco on Mar 5, 2010 20:20:03 GMT -8
Oh completely useless trivia time: If you know who was running the East Germany KGB counter-intell, then you know the real joke about Cold Warrior.
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Post by jensaltmann on Mar 11, 2010 23:57:30 GMT -8
Okay, folks. You get the scoop. Chapter 4 is now up. Introducing ninjas. Chapter 5 will be written by SA's own esteemed Papa Bear! Yay! bit.ly/9QXWOB |
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